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Failure Essay不会写?这里有优秀案例!

发表时间:2015-10-22

Failure Essay不会写?这里有优秀案例!

Essay的种类非常多,在国外大学中也是最常见的作业提交方式之一,国外大学里基本上每周都有Essay小论文,很多中国留学生们都会抱怨作业太多,各式各样的Essay、Assignment、Paper不知道什么时候能写完。不过接下来美伦教育要给大家介绍的Failure Essay的写作方法,以及优秀的Failure Essay案例分享。在很多时候,留学生们在正面想不清楚一个问题的时候,可以考虑从反面来想想,所以,大家在构思一篇Failure Essay的时候,提醒大家最好从以下几个方面去考虑:

1)不要把生活中的一些小Failure写进Failure Essay

有的留学生为了不暴露自己的弊端或者所谓的弱点,就找个不是错误的错误来阐述。这样,反而会让老师觉得你不勇于承认你的错误、避重就轻。千万不要把你上大学的时候没考上名牌大学,没能进到世界五百强实习等等诸如此类这种当作所谓的failure来写。别拿这些小事来糊弄他们!这些根本就算不上是Failure。

2)你觉得把一些特别Trivial的Failure写进去有用吗?

有的留学生倒是写了Failure了,但是Faillure的程度小的不能再小。因为你对Failure的定义,也说明了你的眼界和触地反击的承受能力。老师并不关心你和你爸妈吵架,或者和兄妹吵架中的挫败感,所以这些就没必要写进去了。你经历过的比较大的Failure并且能从中走出来,学到很多,那么这样的Failure写进去是非常加分的。

3)写上自己比较难忘的Failure或许效果会更好

太过诚恳和坦白,也不是件好事。毕竟,我们在写文章时候,要注意老师的喜好。比如看国外的一些失败Essay的案例,有人竟然写自己性侵犯而入狱的历史。没错了,这个确实是个大大的failure,但是,老师会对有这种Failure经历的人产生好感吗?我觉得不能,所以,尽管提倡大家写比较大的Failure,但是大家还是要谨慎选择Failure素材啊。

4)在写Failure本身时更要注重从中学到了什么

在failure的essay中,千万别把重点放在描述Failure故事的本身了。想写出优秀的failure essay,就要多写你的lessons learned,也就是从中学习到的收获,多写你改进后的行为。如果要“避重就轻”的话,这估计是避重就轻最好的切入点了。

5)采用的Failure案例的故事时间不要太久远

 在选择failure essay的素材的时候,一定要把握好火候。别写太小的时候的事情,会让adcom的人觉得你在刻意逃避直面问题本身;也别写离申请时太近的例子,使得你的essay里没有足够的space来给a better you和lessons learned留下余地。

 说了这么多理论知识,还不如直接给大家来点实际的,下面就给大家整理了一篇Failure Essay的优秀案例,留学生们可以从中去学习它的写作技巧,格式等等,看完相信不会写Failure Essay的同学都会受益匪浅。

Question: Describe a failure that you haveexperienced. What role did you play, and what did you learn about yourself?(500 words)

Absolute US was an annual event inSingapore that helped prospective students meet those of us who were alreadyschooling in USA. It is now defunct, but I’d once tried- and failed- toresurrect it.

When I took this up, Absolute US had beenon the brink of death, and I’d begun the project by formulating a three-facetedrevival plan. First, it’d previously been held at Singapore’s largest club, andI decided on a smaller and cozier venue instead.
Second, some games would be organized tospice things up. Finally, a team of motivated shareholders- rather thanlow-energy volunteers- would be assembled by pitching Absolute US as amoney-making venture. Besides arming myself with a good plan, I also workedextremely hard, playing whatever role was necessary- be it the leader who’dformulated the entire plan; the more hands-off project consultant; or theevent’s game designer- to make my re-conceptualization a reality.

I had a good plan, a dedicated team, andhad been doing whatever it took to succeed. But in spite of this, Absolute US2006 boasted historical attendance lows and didn’t make a profit. What’d gonewrong?

Having reflected upon the affair, I nowrealize that the project had been doomed from the start, because of threeerrors in execution.

First, we’d ignored local contexts. Makingplans from abroad left the project without proper intelligence on the ground.I’d designed the new, apparently perfect, plan and organized the team when Iwas in Chicago in April 2006. When my team returned to Singapore in June afterschool had ended, I went to Thailand for a month of social work. As studentswho’d spent the year abroad, we eventually picked a venue that turned out to bea has-been so past its popularity peak that it folded a month after our event.A better appreciation of the need for ground-level research would have servedus well.

Second, as leader I’d failed to strike abalance between involvement with the project vision and its details. I’d workedhard, involving myself in all the project nitty-gritty’s. However, my trying togo it alone working out every detail, rather than trusting others to execute,not only caused a breakdown in communication of the project vision to my team,but also left them without a leader for a short period when I was in Thailand.Though I’d immediately stepped down and become a project consultant insteadafter realizing the problem, it’d been too late. The leaderless period hadalready demoralized my team.

Third, I’d lacked a backup plan. I’d takenfor granted that no hiccups would occur, and when one did, I was caught unprepared.In particular, I’d planned to communicate from Thailand via email, but thiseventually proved unfeasible because I’d unexpectedly lacked Internet access.

What I’d learnt, in short, was that havinga neat idea is no guarantee of successful execution. This had been a painfulbut educational experience, and I look forward to doing things differently- andsucceeding- in future endeavors.

 言而总之,总而言之,写Failure Essay的出发点就是向老师show你已经做了很多很多的事情,但是最终你还是screw things up了,但是你并没有stop在那里,而是借此机会进行了反思和学习。而且,在最后的learning的总结也很给力。一个好的作者不但能够go detail的告诉大家他做了什么,而且,还能够通过1-2句话把自己的反思总结到一个很高的高度。这样的Failure Essay我相信不得高分都难。